Oh wow! So true in most relationships.

Ouch. All too often true. Six steps for mom, one and Dad’s out the door.

So on point! This happens a lot. A woman’s work is never done.

Family problem. Nice poem Jennifer.

Hi Jennifer,
Neat rhyming and rhythm and a portrait of many families. I wondered if the fifth line should read ‘does the kid’s hair’? Thank you for sharing your poem.

VERY TRUE… FUNNY BUT SAD AT THE SAME TIME

Hi Jennifer. Well done with the extra challenges! Like mine, some of the sentences seem a little…wordy/weird–or maybe it just sounds sophisticated! It was fun, wasn’t it? And I think you did a better job with writing it backwards. I was curious about the reason for the fast, so I’m glad you revealed it!! Better than my first thought, a colonoscopy–but I think you can still drink coffee for that. I wonder who rug it was at the beginning of the story. The phlebotomist?

‘that most kingly brown liquid sang out from its styrofoam doom’ – bwahahaha, love that! Well done on the extra challenge. This was great, Jennifer. You managed to avoid the stilted language trap that mine fell into. This was a lot of fun and such a nice twist on the fasting and Dracula theme!

I had to look up what the extra challenge was and i have to say, AMAZING work! I didn’t even notice the lack of Es haha. A really entertaining read. Thank you for writing!

Oh Jennifer this is beautiful. I love the rhythm and rhyme of your poem and the gorgeous soul that it describes. I can feel the energy from your words and the magic that she brings.

You describe the blessing that she is wonderfully. Thanks for sharing.

Such a heartwarming and sweet poem, Jennifer. Thank you for sharing. 🙂

Hi Jennifer,
Your sonnet encapsulates your joy and fascination with the baby. Lovely. And well done with mastering the metre and the rhyme of the sonnet.

Jennifer,
That’s a great sonnet! Thanks for sharing.
Best to you,
Wanda Lovan

This had wonderful energy. Well done!

This is so wholesome. I loved the descriptions of the kids all gathering around, in awe of someone they could look up to. These moments are so precious. Well done 🙂

It all ended too soon, i was totally hooked

This is really lovely. I could picture Tom so well. It can only take the smallest thing sometimes to make a real difference in someone’s life and you expressed that perfectly. Well done 🙂

Great response to the prompt. Beautiful church… in appearance and actions.

may she always

Hi Jennifer,
A lovely bit of writing. May she always do so.

Doctors don’t know everything. Lovely piece. Well done.

So much strength on only one sentence. Well done!

A lot is said in just 6 words. Good job!

Lovely

Hurrah for her! May she continue to thrive! A powerful six words – well done.

This is so gritty and full of suspense. There’s so much in this in so few words. Really good job!

Lots of intrigue here! You’ve done well to create suspense.