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  • Hi Dianne,
    I loved how you described childhood and that yearn that kids have for more. I especially liked this part:
    Like the time Dad wrote a fairy story and read it to my sister and me when we were little and we didn’t like it. He never wrote fiction again I’m ashamed to say and I think that was a waste. He wrote nonfiction sure, but I wou…[Read more]

  • “Five jobs?! How do you have time for fun?!” 

    Yuri chuckled at my loud response. My friend slapped my arm, looking shyly at the other patrons. I was pretty shocked at myself too. I was usually so aware of not […]

    • Hi Chris,
      A very interesting and moving story. I like how you unfold more information about Yuri as the story proceeds. I feel that this could become the template for a much longer story, even a novel. Thanks for sharing.

    • Totally intrigued now as to what happened to him… will you divulge more sometime?

      Thanks for sharing.

  • That’s such a great suggestion! Thank you for taking the time to give this a read. I really appreciate it.

  • Thank you, Ellen! I had fun writing this. I will definitely think about expanding it further.

  • Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story. I really appreciate it.

  • Thank you, Trace! I appreciate your feedback.

  • Thank you for taking the time to give it a read, Amy. I appreciate your feedback.

  • Thank you so much for your feedback, Kim. I agree, I struggled to fill the word count and I got lazy, hahha. I appreciate you taking the time to give it a read.

  • Thank you for your comment, Lucy! I really appreciate your feedback. I will definitely be more aware of my punctuation.

  • The guarded estate was always a mystery to passers by. The name “Oracle Garden” was engraved onto a metal plaque which was securely welded onto the grand gate. There were two entrances. One big enough for veh […]

    • A good concept and a great place for a story. Described well–I hope you go with this and let a neighborhood kid wander in or one of the denizens of the garden wander out.

      • That’s such a great suggestion! Thank you for taking the time to give this a read. I really appreciate it.

    • You had me at magical creatures. I love the description of the different kinds of beings. This could be much expanded. Keep writing!

      • Thank you, Ellen! I had fun writing this. I will definitely think about expanding it further.

  • “Don’t be so blue,” the lady said to the little boy. “We’ll come back and get you more stuff once school actually starts.” She glanced over at the acrylics and instead, grabbed the prepack of basic paints.  It […]

    • I enjoyed this creative POV from the ‘moody’ , slightly needy ‘Blue’ colour – really imaginative. love how the colours convey very clear and distinctive voices and personalities and how their worth is dependent on their hue – really very clever!.

      If I could offer any suggestion? – its to really tighten up your writing – some of the lines read a little repetitive . it does mean finding more words to make up the word count but rather that than ‘over-elaborating’ on the same point again and again.

      other than that, this was good. Enjoyed this – thank you !

      • Thank you so much for your feedback, Kim. I agree, I struggled to fill the word count and I got lazy, hahha. I appreciate you taking the time to give it a read.

    • I really enjoyed this! Such a creative analysis of colour connotations. Really clever way of reading the prompt.

      Minor thing I think you missed a full stop here: I get this way when the store’s busy

      Loved it!

      • Thank you for your comment, Lucy! I really appreciate your feedback. I will definitely be more aware of my punctuation.

  • Hi Zainab, thank you for sharing this heartwarming story about two very determined people. The part where you wrote “In our kind of lives, we do not have the luxury to fall in love. The only thing that we think about was where our next meal was coming from,” really stood out for me. It made my heart go out to the hardworking couple. The story gave…[Read more]

  • My name is Greg and I’m an alcoholic. My father was one too, like his father before him. When dad passed away, my sister pointed out that all I inherited was his habits. I laughed it off, along with her u […]

    • Impressive to fit six perspectives into 1250 words! I appreciated the view of alcohol and the house; it really does feel like you’ve given life to “if these walls could talk.” I especially liked this line: “Depending on the occasion, the eldest of our bunch will usually be delicately picked off the shelf. It was always sad when those bottles left. They’d been there so long and always shared the best anecdotes.” Thanks for sharing your writing!

    • Hi Chris,
      In such a short word count you did really well to convey the devastation of alcoholism on a family. The personification of the home and the alcohol added a new dimension to the story.

    • Such a unique perspective on things! A serious problem dealt in a very subdued yet hard hitting niggle manner. Kudos

    • Such a unique perspective on things! A serious problem dealt in a very subdued yet hard-hitting manner. Kudos!

  • I absolutely loved reading this story. I often wonder around in nature imagining the conversations the plants have with each other. Your story brought the garden to life in a humorous and smart way. I especially enjoyed the descriptions of the other animals too. I can imagine this as a lovely children’s book with beautiful illustrations. Thank…[Read more]

  • The beginning of the story immediately had my interest. I could clearly imagine the events that were happening thanks to your descriptive writing. I’m curious about the stories you will write in the future! Thank you for sharing.

  • Thank you for your comment, Michael. Hopefully there are no more riots to write about but I definitely will keep that idea in mind. Thanks again for taking the time to give this one a read.

  • Hello June! Ah, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this story. Yes, it is about Pietermarizburg and the riots that happened. I too hope things will improve and although a lot has, the tension still remains.

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