• Thank you so much, Ruth, for such a lovely comment. I’m really happy that you enjoyed this story, and had so much fun reading it. Thank you, too, for that catch with the word repetition. I can’t believe I missed that! I’m going to fix it straight away. I very much appreciate your time and your feedback.

  • Thank you do much, Jane. I’m glad you enjoyed the story, and that it had your head going, haha. As always, I so appreciate your time and your comment.

  • Thank you so much, Sudha. I’m glad you enjoyed the story. As I said to Amrita, in a Celtic setting, faeries popping up isn’t really a surprise, though I did have to cut their introduction short for this wordcount. And I did want to establish the Celtic setting better, for sure. That, unfortunately, had to get lost for a bit here. So I certainly…[Read more]

  • Thank you so much, Susan. I’m so happy you had fun reading this story. I really appreciate such lovely feedback, and I’m glad you did take note of some of the foreshadowing. And you’re right, these sort wordcounts force a person to really think about what’s necessary for a story, and makes you consider what’s actually the best for it. Thanks…[Read more]

  • Hi Susan
    This is utterly delightful in every way, and I had a huge smile on my face by the end. This is such a well-written, tight piece of prose, giving a captivating, wonderfully detailed picture of your main character and his world. I thoroughly enjoyed this. Well done, and thank you for sharing.

  • Hi Ruth
    You did this so well. I love your use of dialogue to tell the story, and how well the story unfolded through it, backstory and all. I was have expecting the old Aunt to leave her house to the cat, haha. But the end was so effective, how you answered the question in the title. Really great job. Well done.

  • Hi Neta
    This is so beautifully written. It had me so enthralled, just to read these carefully-chosen words, making this compelling, heart-rending story. I thoroughly enjoyed this read. The only critique I can really give is that the dialogue was a bit confusing. It wasn’t always clear who was saying what. I did have to go back a few times, and I…[Read more]

  • Hi Gretchen
    You really communicate this story so effectively. Your descriptive language is provocative and grounded, and really was what held my attention the most (though the story itself still would have done so, anyway). Very well-written, and a very good story. I’m sorry it’s only ‘kind of’ fiction for you. Well done, and thank you for sharing.

  • Hi Penny
    This is a well-written story, and you hooked me with your characters. I enjoyed reading this piece, and I personally see resolution at the end, for Anna personally, as she lets go rather than falls to resentment. That’s how it comes across to me, anyway. Well done, and thank you for sharing.

  • Hi Francis
    You sincerely manage to render the heart with this story. I liked the complex relationship you portray here, especially as the end sheds light on the father figure and give his character a whole other dimension. You may want to give this another read-through, just because of a few extra or missing words here and there, which we’re all…[Read more]

  • Thank you so much, Ana. I’m always thrilled by a Stephen King comparison (I’m a bit of a nerd when it comes to him. I can read him all day, haha.) I wish I could’ve let out everything that’s in my head for this story. I wrote it so late, so I didn’t have time to find another idea, and I literally just had to cut things as I went. Considering all…[Read more]

  • Thank you so much, June. Yes, the wordcount killed me this month. A lot more was meant to happen in this piece, but I don’t hate what came out. I’m excited to sit properly with it and do it justice. I so appreciate your time and kind feedback.

  • Thank you so much, Estelle. I so appreciate your time and your lovely comment.

  • Thank you so much, Ben. I’m really glad you enjoyed it xxx

  • I feel your pain. I’m a bit embarrassed to say how many years I’ve been working on my novel. I think I have around three chapters before I reach the end, and in between its been research and rewrites and plugging plot holes, and lots of ‘what the hell am I even doing?’ and ‘this is awful’ and ‘I’m actually pulling this off!’ and ‘who am I…[Read more]

  • Hi Summer
    This is a really good story, and I enjoyed how you showed the perspectives of each party leading up to the moment of the conclusion. Your reveal at the end also landed well, and the read is quite compelling overall. The prose does suffer a bit from some unnecessary adjectives, and a fair amount of adverbs – especially adverbial…[Read more]

  • Hi Estelle
    I agree with Paul. The first thing I thought to myself is that you had my attention from the beginning. This is a beautiful story, highlighted with such beautiful moments of Indigo’s memories. I like how you incorporated her grandmother’s voice, showing how powerfully her presence still permeates the house. It brought a needed comfort…[Read more]

  • Hi Matt
    Your story certainly had me hooked . You especially do well with your main character, sprinkling hints of his life here and there. That’s a good technique to use. While I’m sure you have an decent idea of your prose errors by now, I’ll comment on the story itself. The end, especially was a bit deflating, especially after building up this…[Read more]

  • Hi Gold
    I can se that you had fun with this one. I love the cat bringing Lidia back down to earth, and how that little asshole still comes out as more of the hero of the story, contrasted with Lidia and her mother. The way things unfolded made me like the character of Aunt Augustine without even meeting her. I really enjoyed this story. Well…[Read more]

  • Hi Sudha
    This piece is so emotive, in many ways. The mother-daughter dynamic produces a deep frustration in the reader, which is a good thing. You captured a whole family dynamic very well, in fact, and I hope its not all autobiographical. It does make for a captivating piece of writing, however. The end sort of makes it into this circle, where…[Read more]

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