• Oh this was too funny! Tracy was making me laugh the entire time. Reminded me of Michael on the Office.
    “Come hither and look in my desk drawer,”” – This line made me lol
    Well done!! Thanks for sharing!
    Happy holidays!
    Hyle

  • Hey Maria!

    Fantastic end to the year! I love Ozzy’s sarcastic nature and the vampire’s snooty and brutish manner. These two are so unalike but work well together.
    I was laughing through most of the story as well. “”ever-so-tender assault.””” This line had me giggling for a full minute.
    Thanks for sharing! You should consider writing a b…[Read more]

  • Hey Jes!
    I loved this! I am a fan of snakes, as you know and I love how each character was human, yet snake in mind. Lethal.
    Also, I thought there were some parts that reminded me of the stories we’ve done throughout the year and it looks like I’m right and you used all the prompts of the year! That’s so creative!
    Thanks for sharing!
    Happy…[Read more]

  • This can’t be the end! I need more!
    You’ve created such an awesome crime story in the last four months. I cannot wait for what you come up with next year. This was intense and full of surprises.
    (–Religion is a volatile, yet formidable drug – use the correct dose, and rest assured, people will dance to your tunes.–) This line is g…[Read more]

  • Hi Amrita!

    I’m glad you liked it! Definitely the creepiest thing I’ve ever written.
    Thanks for reading!

    Hyle

  • Hi Jes!

    This made me lol. ‘Bugs work too.’ I guess I could have gone a hero route. But my little bug was hungry!
    Thanks for reading!
    Hyle

  • Hi Maria!
    I tried so hard to keep the ‘girl’ a secret until the end. Thanks for reading!
    Merry Christmas!
    Hyle

  • Hi Melissa!

    Thanks so much for reading! I’m glad you liked it!

  • I gripped the bell’s mahogany handle and waved it in wide circles. The tinny chiming made me want to chuck it into the nearest dumpster. Instead, I walked to the street corner with an aching arm and a rumbling s […]

    • That kept me guessing until the end. I thought they would be vampires, and I never would have guessed giant insects! Well done and very easy to read.

    • Hi Hyle,
      You got me. It confused me why she went with him. Now I know! Your stories are my style. Spooky and surprising. I adore your descriptions and I can’t get enough of the blood and gore. Great job.

      Merry Christmas Hyle,
      Maria

    • Such a creepy story. I knew there had to be a reason why she went with the guy. I was more thinking heroic reason but sure bugs work too. Great story and great on your descriptions.

      • Hi Jes!

        This made me lol. ‘Bugs work too.’ I guess I could have gone a hero route. But my little bug was hungry!
        Thanks for reading!
        Hyle

    • Hi Hyle,
      That was such an interesting story! You kept the suspense tight throughout the plot. The characters were well sketched. I loved what you did with the protagonist – a young girl, hungry on a cold night, looking for food, help – I couldn’t help but feel sad for her. And then the creepy man came along. I was wondering like the rest of the readers, why was she hitching a ride with him when she could very well make out that he is a predator. I loved the end. Insects and vermins are something that makes my insides crawl. It was a clever move to not reveal them as vampires. Loved the ending, that was a great climax! Thank you for sharing!

    • Seyi replied 1 month ago

      Hey Hyle. You nailed it with this one. The line “Cars wouldn’t be enough to flatten me,” made me wonder and when your main character entered the van so willingly and seemed to recognize the “standard fare for pedophiles and human traffickers,” I suspected vampires. Great twist at the death (😀) and I loved the names you chose for your main character and her brother. Gremlins got at “Duct” (in Duct tape) and switched it to Duck but apart from this tiny typo, the premise, characters, writing and effect are brilliant. Well done and all the best. Seyi

  • This needs to be a novel! This is something I would read. There is so much to explore when it comes to time traveling, so many directions things could go. I love the heavenly Mirabelle and her foul mouth.
    Lovely job!

  • Hey Maria!
    I’m glad you like it! I will make sure to go through it again and weed out the adverbs. Thanks so much for the advice!
    Hyle

  • Hi Elaine!
    Threw this together pretty fast so things aren’t edited that well. I’m glad you liked the story!
    Thanks!
    Hyle

  • Hey Amrita!
    I’m glad you liked my story!
    And there are no stupid questions! That first bit was supposed to be ‘Arthur.’ That was a typo I missed. And yes, the woman is there for the same offense. They reinstated the Knights in a future setting. The Fates are quite mysterious!
    Thanks again for reading!
    Hyle

  • Hi Seyi!
    I’m glad you found another story of mine that you enjoy! This one was a lot of fun to write.
    You’re right about the wall/wasteland. I hesitated to put a wall up; probably something I will edit out later. Five hundred is not enough words! I might expand this story at a future date.
    Thanks so much for reading!
    Hyle

  • Hi Maria!
    It was a lot of fun to write. I love comedy and once in a while, I try writing it. I thought it would be funny if Merlin hated the knights of the roundtable. And got in trouble for taking all their sacred quests.
    Thanks for reading!
    Hyle

  • Hi Whimsical!
    I am so glad you liked the story! I actually stumbled across a prompt that inspired this story. I may expand on this story in the future. I’ve always wanted to do a King Arthur retelling. Maybe something post-apocalyptic.
    Thanks so much for reading!
    Hyle

  • Hey Jes!
    I’m glad you like it! This was a fun one to write!
    Thanks for reading!
    Hyle

  • Oh wow, Maria!
    This is so creepy and cool! My kind of story!
    I love the little tidbits you give about Devin, Bristol, Ember, and Aubrey. The tension rising as they try to drink the potion and then having to restart at the beginning like a bad video game is exciting!
    Great job! December is the last month of this year! Can’t wait to see your…[Read more]

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