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Brendon Garner wrote a new post, When I was Twenty-Two by Brendon Garner 1 month, 2 weeks ago
When I was Twenty-Two by Brendon Garner
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When I was twenty-two, I was lost.
Two overdoses, two relationships that were bogus,
Too blind to notice, it was all my fault.I would snowboard to clear my mind.
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Dedication to Unforgettable Jamie Dedes by anjum wasim dar 2 months, 1 week ago
Sounds like Jamie was a wonderful person. Great job, Anjum.
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Master Po by Susan C. Evans 2 months, 1 week ago
I was just waiting for a Young Grasshopper reference. Great job. The first one painted of nice picture of Master Po and the second imparted his wisdom.
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, What Is Inside by Debbie Gravett 2 months, 1 week ago
Wow. Just wow. “Dictator of where thoughts go” really got me. We have to fight that shadow and stand up to its tyranny!
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Carew Castle by Christian Donovan 2 months, 1 week ago
Um, excuse me as I put on my armor. Well done, Christian.
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Deadlines for Writers by Brendon Garner 2 months, 1 week ago
Debbie, glad I’m not the only one! Thank you for the feedback!
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Deadlines for Writers by Brendon Garner 2 months, 1 week ago
Susan, that’s all we can do…. Thanks for your reply.
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Deadlines for Writers by Brendon Garner 2 months, 1 week ago
Thanks for the feedback Christian!
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Deadlines for Writers by Brendon Garner 2 months, 1 week ago
Thanks Anjum!
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Brendon Garner wrote a new post, Deadlines for Writers by Brendon Garner 2 months, 2 weeks ago
Deadlines for Writers by Brendon Garner
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Deadlines looming at the end of
Everyday. I lie awake at night,
Awkwardly aware of the potential I wasted.
Dedication to the craft
Limited only by my
Inability to […]
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That is the way it happens generally A true picture
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Thanks Anjum!
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Hi Brendan,
A good dose of advice for us all, neatly packaged as an acrostic. Thank you!-
Thanks for the feedback Christian!
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I am sure Mia will appreciate this as do I. Sound advice…Write On For The Art.
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Susan, that’s all we can do…. Thanks for your reply.
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Oh my goodness Brendon! Other than the ‘son’ I will say thanks for writing this poem for me. 😆
This was great and spot on with how I feel every day. The piece flows and I liked the rhythm, seeing myself in each sentence.
Great poem. Well done and thanks for sharing.
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Debbie, glad I’m not the only one! Thank you for the feedback!
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Poems Should Rhyme by Brendon Garner 3 months, 1 week ago
Christian, if I had your skill I wouldn’t need to rhyme!! Thanks for the comment and the artistic understanding…
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Poems Should Rhyme by Brendon Garner 3 months, 1 week ago
Glad you enjoyed it K! I was worried some would not…
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Self-doubt by Christian Donovan 3 months, 1 week ago
Your skill shines through in this piece…. well done, Christian
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Brendon Garner wrote a new post, Poems Should Rhyme by Brendon Garner 3 months, 2 weeks ago
Poems Should Rhyme by Brendon Garner
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Whether it’s a limerick or sonnet,
Bro get on it.
Poems should rhyme.Reading free verse feels like
I’m eating a sandwich meat first.
Poems should rhymeAn ode you rem […]
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Enjoyable…I laughed out loud at the “eating a sandwich meat first” line, and can’t get ‘limerick or a sonnet, Bro get on it” out of my head. Just a fun batch of lines…nice job!
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Glad you enjoyed it K! I was worried some would not…
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Hi Brendon, I couldn’t disagree more with the thesis of your poem but I would defend to the death your right to express this opinion. Well done for sharing it. Now duck the brickbats.
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Christian, if I had your skill I wouldn’t need to rhyme!! Thanks for the comment and the artistic understanding…
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, You Tell Me by Susan C. Evans 3 months, 3 weeks ago
Why? We will probably never know… Nice work, Susan
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Why wasps? by Christian Donovan 3 months, 3 weeks ago
Wasps do need a good rebranding…. Well done, Christian!
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Generation Why by Brendon Garner 3 months, 3 weeks ago
Had the same idea…. thanks Christian!
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Daybreak. By E. Damon Mitchell 4 months, 1 week ago
Nice. Great poem.
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Brendon Garner commented on the post, Generation Why by Brendon Garner 4 months, 1 week ago
Thanks for the feedback David. I like to write poems that rhyme. I agree, the intro doesn’t tie in with the rest of the poem but sometimes I just vomit on the page and go from there. Also, I am American and speak English, I just have the grammatical skills of a 5th grader.Thanks!
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Brendon Garner wrote a new post, Generation Why by Brendon Garner 4 months, 1 week ago
Generation Why by Brendon Garner
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I drive drunk for years but Josh wrecks and gets paralyzed?
I watch our whole culture live dirty, but I have to sterilize?
My soul, a black hole, this life got the best of […]
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I like the juxtaposition of ironies at the outset, but I don’t see the tie to the rest of the poem. Your use of rhyme is good. Often it can make the poem seem sing-song. Here it works. I think you earned the conclusion, which is much less concrete than the rest of the poem. (I would put the closing quotation mark outside the period–that’s the convention in American English. I don’t know your background, though.)
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Thanks for the feedback David. I like to write poems that rhyme. I agree, the intro doesn’t tie in with the rest of the poem but sometimes I just vomit on the page and go from there. Also, I am American and speak English, I just have the grammatical skills of a 5th grader.Thanks!
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Hi Brendon. I like the way your poem portrays the way a person finds it difficult to voice the enigmas of life. I agree that the first couple of lines are not really part of this poem. Perhaps they could form the start of another one?
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Had the same idea…. thanks Christian!
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Wow…there is a great deal going on in this soul. I feel the weariness.
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Oh, the early 20s can be such torture. I like the contrast of content to rhythm, the anguish related in a jaunty rhyming. The twos and the toos are effective. Well done, with the poem and the climbing up and out.
Oh, my goodness. This is a sad but relatable piece. Twenty-two is a crappy age. No longer a child, not quite an adult, hormones raging in a sensitive soul. Nothing is our fault, everything is our fault. Crazy year that twenty-two.
I had to look up a deuce deuce. Interesting word. I’m happy you didn’t use it.
Happy Holidays!
Hi Brendon, a powerful and painful poem. Your line ‘My father called, I didn’t listen,’ hit me hard….well done….also your closing line into which i read hope ( i hope)….peace.
Hi Brendon,
What a tale – I hope the narrator has recovered from the addiction. It’s a very strong poem with disturbing images, emphasised by the persistent -oose rhyme of deuce duece, loose, obtuse, noose. Thank you for sharing it.