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  • Jane, thank you 😊
    Your feedback is valued! I made a few corrections.

    And I am so glad that you liked and enjoyed the poem. It’s been a pleasure doing this with an awesome community of writers.

    Compliments of the season!

  • Thank you Maria!

    I took your suggestion into consideration and edited the T 😊

    I am glad you enjoyed it and yes, your interpretation is close to what I was aiming to portray

  • Hello Anjum! Thanks for stopping by 😃 and that’s indeed true

  • Thanks Lauren! I was hoping people wouldn’t miss the play at duality 😃 thanks for the feedback and kindness. Compliments of the season!

  • Hi Marcena
    Thank you so much for reading and sparing time to comment. I am glad that it resonated with you — those are some of my favorite lines too.

  • Blurred linesBetween needs and wantsI flirted with darkness Yet my soul craved lightLies clung to my heart like mud Truth seemed to elude meMy mind hurtI desperately sought restMy body felt strange I had lost my […]

    • Hi PC,
      I really enjoyed your poem:) I liked the shape of it and you had me hooked right at the beginning with these fabulous starting lines:
      Blurred linesBetween needs and wantsI flirted with darknessYet my soul craved lightLoved them.

      I have one tiny suggestion and it is only my opinion. But as I read your poem I felt like this line would sound better without the ‘for’ in it:
      My mind hurtI desperately sought for restMy body felt strangeI had lost my way homeWhen you look at all those lines near each other it just seemed to me that it flowed better as – I desperately sought rest

      My personal opinion, and poetry is very personal. So feel free to totally ignore me:)

      In any case I liked your poem a lot:) Thanks for sharing.

      • Jane, thank you 😊
        Your feedback is valued! I made a few corrections.

        And I am so glad that you liked and enjoyed the poem. It’s been a pleasure doing this with an awesome community of writers.

        Compliments of the season!

    • I enjoyed this piece.

      I imagined a person on the edge of life and death. For a moment they are taken to the other side and linger in the darkness. Then the craving for light became too much. No sooner did they accept the fact that they are moving in the light’s direction than they’re pulled back to our world.

      That’s my take on the piece. It was beautiful.

      In the line:

      But Truth said that I’d live another day

      I don’t think you need the capital T in truth.

      Great piece. Happy New Year and have an amazing holiday. I hope to read your work in 2021.

      • Thank you Maria!

        I took your suggestion into consideration and edited the T 😊

        I am glad you enjoyed it and yes, your interpretation is close to what I was aiming to portray

    • Light is the ultimate truth. A beautiful poem of Life transformation and reality.

    • Lots of fun examinations of duality here–what a great take on the prompt. Nicely done!

      • Thanks Lauren! I was hoping people wouldn’t miss the play at duality 😃 thanks for the feedback and kindness. Compliments of the season!

    • Dear Poem Crush, this resonates and is so deep. I have so many favorite lines like: “lines clung to my heart like mud” and “but I was split in two”. This is so real, raw, and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing your awesome work!

      • Hi Marcena
        Thank you so much for reading and sparing time to comment. I am glad that it resonated with you — those are some of my favorite lines too.

    • I very much like your start: ‘Blurred lines / between needs and wants’ – the first of the opposites which you examine in this emotional poem.

      I hope you have an enjoyable festive season and look forward to reading more of your poems in 2021.

  • So beautiful
    I love this style of writing too …as well as the openness to interpretation for the reader there at end
    One may say they become a couple or they live independently but home is where they find themselves

  • Whoa ! That’s very well communicated

  • A lot of love in the poetry streets, loved this!

  • Wow, this is so beautiful
    I’m very nervous about mine. I wonder if it’ll make sense …related to this a lot! Beautiful writing

  • Hello June 😄
    Thank you, that is very helpful. In fact I was paranoid that people may miss the Acrostic so it makes sense that the title comes off too strong …let me edit. Thank you again

  • Beautiful! The use of faith, hope and love was spot on

  • Ohh this is smart and relatable too

  • Goodness!! This is so real
    I am captivated. Being a student nurse it hit close to home well done

  • This is really cool
    I liked the Othello cameo, one of my faves

  • Hi Dianne
    Interesting take on the writing 😃 thank you you for the valuable feedback

  • Hello Marcena
    I am glad that you could relate with the writing
    Thank you so much for the priceless feedback!

  • Hey Christian
    Thank you so much. I’m glad you enjoyed it !

  • Thank You 😊
    First time writing an acrostic — the whole 12 poems experience has been a learning curve
    This feed back means a lot.

  •  Every day, when you wake upVenture into life’s flow with hope.One with your dreams,Live to become the best version of yourself.Value the process of refinement,Embody the beauty of heeding purpose’s call […]

    • Interesting acrostic. I heard a tune in my head when I was reading it as if it were a song. Lovely.

    • Hello Poem Crush,
      I love this acrostic. It gives me hope and I enjoyed the opening line and could envision myself waking up saying these things to myself. All about mindset. Excellent mantras. Thanks for sharing. Well done.

    • Hi Poem Crush, Your poem reflects a meaning of evolve, and also gives a lifestyle to live by. I enjoyed reading it.

    • Hi, Your acrostic poem is filled with hopefulness and challenge in equal parts. Would that the world embraced the theme of your poem!

      • Thank You 😊
        First time writing an acrostic — the whole 12 poems experience has been a learning curve
        This feed back means a lot.

    • Hi Poem Crush. I enjoyed how your poem ‘evolved’ from waking up in the morning to embodying purpose. Very well constructed. I do think, however, that you could leave out the capitalisation and the full stops in your title. It’s a great title, but in its present state it seems to be shouting too loud for your reader to notice the fact that you have cleverly created an acrostic form poem. Just my thoughts – use or lose. Thank you for sharing.

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