• I agree that I thought it was first a couple and then I felt like this applies to a larger narrative that is dispelled when hit by the light, or the truth, which is how I see the light. I am not sure I completely understand this poem. I like the words parading into the bog though. Just like others said, lots to think about.

  • I almost feel like this is in two parts. I thought the first was so evocative of the pleading to a mother about ones fair share and the pleading alone would be the poem, but then the tidal wave that comes when she consents…and then it doesn’t feel like one expected. I definitely feel this as my parents sold my childhood home this month that…[Read more]

  • I like the repetition. Really drove the sad point home of how lonely and monotonous her time on Earth is. I did something about aging people too. Thanks for sharing this.

  • oh, heart wrenching. I love what people do with acrostic poems in this group and this just snatches up your breath. Well done.

  • Wow, this is very well done, and I love the different take on the prompt. I agree with other commenters that the rhythm goes well with the topic of the running mill and the day’s end. And the image of the empty cart at the end nails it.

  • Yes, very apt, relatable and great word choices. The blank page can certainly feel like a void…and we can certainly feel like we become it. Thanks for sharing 🙂

  • Jealous that you can dismiss those pesky thoughts that insist on attention when we are trying to clear our minds! Lovely topic and depiction of meditation!! Awesome use of ‘blank.’

  • Aging Parents by Beth Stillman Blaha


    When recognition behind the eyes

    begins to evaporate

    their world dulling to neutrals

    experiences don’t process

    and fail to impact gnarled memory centers,

    that’s when […]

    • Wow Beth! This is a very powerful piece and so true for so many of the elderly. I liked this: gnarled memory centers. I can see a brain, wrinkled like the hands of an old person, memories trapped in the valleys and now difficult to retrieve.

      Thanks for sharing.

    • Hi Beth, Yes indeed, you nailed it. I have been spending a lot of time in a hospital recently as my mum is there waiting for a bed in a nursing home. I see so many elderly people there and they all seem to have that far off glazed look. It is quite heartbreaking indeed. The circle of life can be a little cruel near the end. Beautifully captured.

    • Hi Beth, this is powerful stuff and so sad. You pull the reader into the sadness. Love you closing where we move them into spaces that are blank. Well doe.

    • I like how this is so concisely matter of fact and yet says a lot about the reality of having ageing parents and not being able to take care of them any more. Growing up I lived with my grandmother who had senile dementia. This resonates with me at a deep level.

    • So true, and so concisely written. Well done with this poem. This is a scenario which I am not looking forward to!

    • Hi Beth,
      The last lines,
      and that’s when we move them into spaces that are increasingly blank. very sad but something we must all face.

  • Poor girl. Does this mean the observer tried his hand with her, too and got the taken line? Ha. Creative take on the prompt and I love the title.

  • So much said from one little word for the prompt. So many ways to think about what we take and what is stolen. Well done.

  • I like that this starts as an external issue but it becomes apparent that its an internal one. I think that people who really struggle to make the best of circumstances get in their own way like this. Poignant for our times. Thanks for sharing.

  • The subtlety of the rhyme and the openness of the motives of the narrator are the genius of this work. Well done.

  • This is the perfect description of the experience of finishing a long, consuming novel. Being taken in, taken for a ride and a void left when it’s over. Well done.

  • Yes, I agree with Christian that nature continues and keeps us grounded through all this. I have been lucky enough to have the kind of place to quarantine in. I like how work settings are being taken over by plants, the way the beaches are being taken over by wildlife. Things so important to the human race just have different implications to…[Read more]

  • I like how you bring in so many aspects of assault. The struggle with evidence, the victim blaming, her racing thoughts. I’m a child and family therapist and anyone who dares say rape culture is not real needs to come sit in my chair for a week. Thanks for tackling something so hard. I agree with the others that I like how it’s interrupted at T.

  • You do have some excellent phrases in here, like “the one that gave you air” and “a still-beating heart will work, but not the same as before.” Such a sad story of damage and betrayal and just because you have people doesn’t make you curious about those who have turned their backs. Thanks for sharing this, it’s well done.

  • I like how this attraction she feels is based on more than just what the guy looks like. The way he sounds, the way he smells. That he’s not perfect looking but his lips feel just right. Touching and romantic. I think we can all appreciate a little romance right now. Thanks for sharing!

  • I. Youthful Misconceptions

    The best were taken

    Then I found the very best

    Just waiting for me

    II.  Pandemic

    Much has been taken

    Sixty days revealing the

    truest importance

    • Limor replied 1 month ago

      Hi Beth!
      I love your Haiku. I enjoyed the fact that you did 2 and that they were totally unrelated but maybe they were actually completely linked!
      Poetry is heavenly.
      Thank you,

    • Hello Beth,
      I enjoyed reading these poems. You say quite a bit in so few words. Well done.

    • Two great haikus. Well done.

    • Hi Beth, i find haikus are tough in landing the point but you’ve scored on both of these…..well done

    • Ah, I agree with Glen’s observation here above, Beth. 🙂
      Might I suggest you add a extra break between the title & first lines, as well as between the two poems? On first read I tried reading it all together.. 😛
      Also: maybe only capitalize the first letter of each haiku and then end the third line with a period? Or no punctuation and no capitals? (Shrugs, just a thought!)
      Thorough reads! 😉

    • Hi Beth, love your two Haiku with a title each. Great choice of words. Well done and thanks for sharing.

  • These are well rhymed words and it is smoothly done. I agree with Charles was that it’s not quite a villanelle, but it doesn’t make it any less lovely. I have been trying to appreciate time and slowing down more with the pandemic. What choice do we have than to be mindful? Thanks for sharing 🙂

  • I did something about the pandemic too. I feel the boredom and feelings of isolation you’re trying to convey. Like Ismael says, I am glad we have the interwebs, but I don’t know how I would have survived this before I had my husband and son. Nice work, thanks for sharing.

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