Oh I like this a lot. It leaves you with a lot of questions… if this is not my beacon, what is? Is there a beacon that I’m missing?

I like the way you’ve played with words and the idea of light. And the ‘pointed precision’ of the light. Thanks for sharing your piece.

Hello AV,
I like the individual images of different sorts of light you have conjured up. Well done with the poem.

HI AV, I am wondering: if all the light you describe is not my beacon, then what is? It could be very powerful to write a second poem about the nature of that beacon. But that is just a reader’s wishful thinking 😉 I like the descriptions of the light and how the light moves, you create some very powerful images. I like how the light is playful and yet can shine with precision into the chasm where our dread and fears reside. Thank goodness it can do that…Well done!

Very atmospheric! Built a wonderful level of threat without establishing too much detail – allowing my mind to imagine all sorts of scenarios.

Words, well used.

Thanks for sharing.

This is very intriguing. You have really built an eerie mood that draws the reader in. I wonder where it will lead.

Hi! I enjoyed your prose, with phrases like “fell into a heap of bones” and “Caves that conveniently let in too little light and let out too much noise” really setting up an ominous atmosphere. Take care.

You have built the tension and sense of impending doom well. Now I want to know how he uses his words to turn the tide of aggression. You have created a character of erudite talents. I have no doubt that he will prevail.

I like this a lot. It has a lovely, natural rhythm to it. A suggestion is that you break it up into a more poetic form and/or add more punctuation.
I look over my shoulder
at the trail
heavily trodden and the narrow strip of grass I’ve tended,
like a road reaching back
to another life
(just my 2c worth)

A very deep poem. I love it. Good job.

Hello AV,
I understand why you chose the prose-poem format for this as it is true stream of consciousness. Your argument follows an interesting circular route and I don’t believe stringing it out down the page would help it. My only suggestion would be that you take out the bit inside the brackets – your metaphor for choices being animated is quite clear without further explanation to the reader. The poem’s a challenging read, but very interesting.