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  • The writing flowed almost effortlessly and I was riveted; if a bit spooked. You create the mood very clearly.I want to know if there is anything more or are we deliberately left to ponder the shoes and the piano. This story is going to stay with me for a while. Thanks so much.

  • This is a very poignant piece of writing. The tone undercuts the depth of sadness so cleverly. It’s almost caustic. It’s the death of the painting, and the relationship that matters far more than death. I thought this was excellent and I loved it. Easy to read because of the style but hard content. So, so good.

  • The story moved fast – which I love-. Very clever to show that Mark is indulged and selfish from the outset without using a sledgehammer approach. You create much of the atmosphere with a deft touch. Although the middle moved hectically fast, it still worked and made sense. The story made me sad – which means it evoked emotion which is another…[Read more]

  • I love your writing. Your imagery is excellent and so unlaboured. I can feel the aridness of the place and then it produces this mystery and mysticism, I could never imagine emanating from there. It is so well crafted too. LOVED IT

  • I so enjoyed this. The domestic space is so well captured, I could almost smell it. Without masses of description, I felt right there and that the writer was very present in the space too. I especially enjoyed the inherent wisdom of the piece. Lovely clear writing which flowed logically and meaningfully and which made it very easy to read. Thank you

  • This is a very engaging read and I need to know more. It is very dad and the mood is well captured. I am wondering what happened to the little girl – or am I being a careless reader? Because its a first draft I am not going to comment on tense (something I struggle with as I muddle it up within a story- ) I would love to read the edited version…[Read more]

  • Thanks Sue – yes that era. Few want to even read about it! Thanks for your comments.

  • Thanks. Not sure people would really be interested in her tales. Thanks for reading my work – appreciate it.

  • Test back. Thanks for this space to write. It is great.

  • Thanks Deb. I think the MC is just one of those confused people!

  • Thanks for your comments and your observation, appreciated.

  • Thanks for your kind comments and for reading my work, Stevie.

  • Thanks for your encouragement.

  • Thank you so much, Astrid.

  • The Heavy Lightness of Truth by Meg Fargher

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    I started out heavy.  9 pounds and 14 ounces to be exact, and it looks like I will end heavy, even though the in-between bits have been small to medium.  Female, a […]

    • Hi Meg, Such a lovely tale you weaved, filled with rich imagery and colorful characters. I loved the way you used the turtle’s flipper as the precursor to an imminent change. The cynical tone was superb. Thank you for sharing such a rich and well-written story. Hats off! Astrid

    • You had me hooked from the very first line. So many should have saids, but sometimes the best answer is to do. We most doubt ourselves and the professor obviously saw something in her from the start. You portrayed the perfect cloistered world of the school, creating an underlying tension to all the perfection. There are a few themes to explore here, great job I enjoyed this.

    • I was smiling throughout! The way you described the hoity-toity school and the queen of hearts was quite engrossing and entertaining. Great work! And amazing work showing us the environment without losing sight of the MC’s POV.

    • Meg, let me say immediately that your story (I have not yet others but shall do in a minute) stands out here among what is offered.
      It rolls along well, their irony has a light touch, keeps you reading (and I’ve only just realised why, when I read many stories here, I have to force myself to carry on) and you make it come alive, especially the smug, fat, headmistress.
      The only thing which jarred – a very, very slight thing – was having you ‘thump’ the plates back in the cupboard.

    • Hi Meg, Well done here, I love your character’s voice, its clear and strong and I would like to sit down for a cup of coffee (or, more likely, a glass of wine) with her. After re-reading, I am still a little fuzzy on whether she is glad she took the headmistress job or not – but I suppose that is the point, that fate deals us a hand and we have to make choices without knowing the outcome of doing or saying something differently. I loved the turtle’s flipper imagery. Excellent use of the prompt! Thanks for sharing.

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    • I loved this… wonderful retrospective and loved the description of GB (serves them right). Your MC had a great journey and I’d bet she has more tales to tell if you let her.

      • Thanks. Not sure people would really be interested in her tales. Thanks for reading my work – appreciate it.

    • Sue replied 2 weeks ago

      An excellent and amusing tale making me very glad I never taught at a private gel’s school. But I can certainly relate to the era of which you write. I also liked how you used the prompt throughout the narrative.

    • I loved your descriptions.

    • Hi, Meg, that was a lovely story and I enjoyed reading it, especially some of your descriptions which made me smile. Just one thing, should it be ‘past its sell-by-date’? Thank you for sharing.

    • Enjoyed your humour. Well done!

    • I felt like I was standing next to your MC throughout the story. Thank you for a great read.

    • Such a lovely way with language! It took me back years to my school days and the reading of ‘formal’ novels. Your descriptions are fabulous – that Turtle and its flipper – a creature much loved by Stephen King in his Dark Tower series and connected works.
      Just one thing pulled me up as ‘passed its sell by date’ -I think that should be ‘past its sell by date’

  • Goodness, you really made me despise Melissa. You juxtapose the two loves of the friends and set up the reasons for the tension very successfully. At times, I wondered if you could use actions and suggestions rather than being explicit. So for example, Melissa did not want to admit to herself that it was resentment that wracked her conscience…[Read more]

  • Thanks so much for your useful comments – all of them make sense and I agree with them. I appreciate your encouragement a great deal.

  • Thank you so much for this encouraging response. I cannot tell you how much it helped me to think that maybe someone will enjoy my writing. I am not sure what is going on either – that’s what came out of the keyboard! And yes, the poetry needs to be more subtle. Thanks again and I hope that you have someone make your day, like you made mine.

  • I loved this story. The writing reminded me of Ursula le Guin’s, Earthsea. The gentle force of Ilyra is made real by the lovely imagery you use. For example, she binds herself to the gate but a merest tendril shall enter Valdemar’s sleep…to slay. Such sensitive juxtaposing of ideas adds a richness to the story telling. I saw all manner of…[Read more]

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