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  • Hi Lenore. I like the idea that is may be completely outrageous, I think you could play with that. Also agree with June, that it can be confusing at times. But I love the setting, the inherent family drama and the sense of the unexpected.

  • Thanks for this lovely review. It made my day.

  • I’m a sucker for a romance, and this one was lovely. A nice escapist story after a long week of work. Thanks. Keep it up.

  • The Tour Operator by Anthony

    Paris, July 2019

    The American arrived on a Saturday afternoon after the weekend manifestations and in the middle of a heatwave. The inside of the taxi reeked of dead cigarette smoke […]

    • You do a fabulous job of dropping the reader into the scene. Your pacing is taut and swift and you keep the suspense elevated. I definitely want to read more about these dangerous men and their shadowy world. Very well done!

  • Don’t worry, I’m the same. If procrastination paid, I’d be richer than Gates and Bezos put together, hehe.

  • I think the alternating scenes between past and present worked quite well. It’s amazing how things can reach breaking point in one irrevocable moment. For just 500 words, it packs a punch.

  • Lovely! I immediately like Otto, it’s hard not to fall for him – and the ending is so funny and clever (without trying to be clever).

  • Powerful. I sit here trying to imagine what it would be like to receive a mail like that, I can’t.

  • A really good short story, that suited the word length perfectly. It was part Hitchcock, part Roald Dahl-ish, nice macabre tones. The description of the dead mouse stood out for me. My only note would be: if you’d had more time, it could have been a more polished production. But I really enjoyed it.

  • Thanks Nina. And thank you for picking up those gremlins – that’s what happens when you change names at the last hour haha.

  • Thanks Delphine. I can’t wait to read your story.

  • The Housesitter by AnthonyBentley sat on the unmade bed, watching her. The red miniature poodle cocked his head as Delphine slid the hard-shell suitcase from the top shelf. He emitted a sad, questioning little […]

    • Cute and heartwarming. Plus the MC has my name and is a dog lover – win win!
      Slightly predictable but all the more charming while the reader waits for it to happen.
      Couple of little edits needed (Now Nora came to her doorway now etc) but shouldn’t take long to perfect
      Good use of prompt too. Nice work

    • Hi sweet story. I like the dialogue, shows how close Delphic and her stepmom are. A lot of nice details, the old lady using the kitchen doors, the hard-shell suitcase. I thought Delphine was older at the start and wondered where she was going. I’m gathering Tim is Max?

      • Thanks Nina. And thank you for picking up those gremlins – that’s what happens when you change names at the last hour haha.

    • Hi Anthony!
      Great fun story.
      I loved the irony in the end as Delphine’s stepmother has been proven wrong, i.e., the right boy did show up on their doorstep after all!
      I also liked that the dog had his own opinion about his previous sitter, and no one could guess about it. These contrasting perspectives make the story more compelling.
      I wonder if you intend to continue the story. That would be a sweet teen novel. I love the sort, by the way. 🙂
      Thanks for sharing.

    • Yeah, I enjoyed reading a light, innocent teen story. I never would have guessed 😀. The dialogue was great. Those pet names, though: Aristotle is grandiose for a hamster! Take care.

  • Anthony commented on the post, Flow by Cobus Kruger 3 months ago

    Excellent pace, which perfectly matches an underwater adventure of this nature. It was very tense, thrilling and brilliantly described (great visual storytelling here). It does come across as very authentic, and the passion for diving comes through.

  • This was a great story, John. Agree with Adam that it was mesmerizing – maybe because you matched the rhythms of the story with the sea. The moments in the sea were told with such clarity and authenticity, one felt you were there in that blue sea. A great experimental form to tackle, and I feel it worked rather well.

  • Anthony commented on the post, Artist by Anthony 3 months ago

    So glad the twist caught you by surprise, Zefira!

  • I was immediately involved in the story, and drawn to Liv’s dilemma. You always have such a strong narrative energy and a bold use of plot in your stories, which I admire. In my mind, you’re a natural storyteller. I think there is, perhaps, too much story for the length but, having said that, I think it would make a great novel. You certainly…[Read more]

  • Anthony commented on the post, Artist by Anthony 3 months ago

    Thanks so much, Nina!

  • Superb! I love how you wove in the lyrics from evocative and bluesy music into this story of a little girl lost, a drifter. She is an archetypal figure, born to run, restless and beautiful. I loved the line “wrong-way girl she was”. The story was moody, sad, and and sexy in its way. The broken, elliptical style suited the character. (I’d have…[Read more]

  • The Artist by AnthonyThe kettle screamed on the stove. Denny shivered in his thin crimson-coloured kimono as he padded barefoot into the dark kitchen.  The air came up from under the wooden floors, turning his […]

    • Whoa what a beautiful prose poem of a story. So moody and filled with gorgeous imagery and bits of backstory. And the twist at the end was chilling, other-worldly and completely credible.

    • Hi Anthony,
      Powerful visual description! I could feel the heaviness of their relationship and the darkness surrounding Adriaan. Pretty bleak! Well done on a strong story.

    • Wow, Anthony! What a masterpiece this one was!
      It was a tense reading; I thought Adriaan would murder Denny at some point but could never foresee this ending.
      I love the way you write, Nina is right; it is a poem written as prose. Some of my favorite parts were:
      “In the frame of the open back door, Adriaan stood shrouded by a mist-wet and cold late April morning.” Strong imagery!
      “Like the mountain’s iron attracting the lightning, he drew sadness and darkness to his soul. Old devils cooked in a pot for a long, long time.” Just perfect! 🙂
      “His eyes were as blue as an abandoned heaven.” Such a sad and deep comparison.
      “He loved him even though the love itself was gone.” Love couldn’t be sadder than that, but still beautiful.
      Thank you so much for sharing!

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