• The Art of Misdirection by Anne Whitehead Scene 42/52

     This belongs much earlier in the story, gives a flavour of Melanie’s homelife and the beginning of her relationship with Horton

    BARBARA AND MEL MEET FOR LU […]

  • Hi Deryn
    Loved this scene – such a different Fran, she’s mellowing nicely. The whole thing shows a brand new life opening up for her and there’s a feeling of happy ever afters opening up for others as well. You are a kind lady!
    I was impressed by ‘…her feelings for him settled into the acknowledged but unaddressed category.’ Summed up a…[Read more]

  • Hi Eva-Maria
    I know how you feel – I’ve got that one foot nailed to the floor feeling at the moment, but we’re so very nearly there! Please don’t skip a week, we’d miss you!

  • Hi Deryn
    Yes, I remember Bobby Sands so will have to get going on researching this again. So far I’ve read that you can do without food for an awfully long time but without water it’s over much more quickly. Hmmm….
    Carrie and Amy have a way to go yet, I’m reluctant to let them go!
    Thanks for reading and commenting, isn’t it weird to think…[Read more]

  • Hi Marilyn
    Now there’s a thought – she might have wanted to let people know that she knows/suspects Melanie is behind this (who else would it be?) Will give this some thought for v2 – thanks for the suggestion.

  • Hi Julie
    Thank you so much for that, this is the first setting where the detail has come along comfortably (no surprise there then!).
    Writing it made me suspect I have to mention way back that Amy has had relationships with men, even though Carrie hasn’t. So much to revise in v2!
    Thanks for commenting, appreciate it so much.

  • Hi Eva-Maria
    Thanks for the reassurance!
    Your memory is excellent, Amy started off at a radio station but I’ve given her a change of career! I think the Arts were far more accepting of women than the police force, even though there are still limits on that tolerance.
    I did toy with having the Beatles show up but decided that was a bit…[Read more]

  • Hi Julie
    A couple of brief but powerful scenes. Roman seeking help was met with initial suspicion, showing us how careful people had to be. I wondered if the woman observing him at the door is going to be significant?
    So the unknown person at the end of last week still has a fancy for Bridget! “The sun high in the sky silhouetted his thin, lone…[Read more]

  • Hi Eva-Maria
    Query – ‘little Amira’. Do you age if you’re imprisoned in a magic lamp? Just wondering.
    Some gems –
    “Slanted almond shaped eyes and (rather unfortunately, thought Evie) the same tufts of silky nasal hair.” LOL. Where do you get these from!!!
    “They lingered for just a moment before jumping apart.” Is this how to indicate a great…[Read more]

  • Hi David
    Loved the description of the sound of cloven- footed pens on parchment – so vivid.
    I thought Constantine’s death was a but hurried. He moved from being sufficiently lucid to express his wishes about the disposal of the empire to being dead in unseemly haste. An opportunity to show us some of the reactions of those around him?
    And…[Read more]

  • Hi Jan
    Another moving scene, can’t bring myself to feel sorry for Vivien, but it’s tough. In her shoes, I don’t think I’d have risked being so snippy with Robert.
    I was a little confused about this, where Vivien is left alone as Robert leaves: “But Robert, I always knew it was you.” she whispered to his back.” What did she know?
    The mega que…[Read more]

  • Hi Marilyn
    Tomi certainly has her hands full here. The plot is getting twistier (is that a word?) by the week and I’m looking forward to a happy resolution!
    Would a quick reminder of David Parente be good at this point? He started it off by getting killed, so presumably all that’s going on is connecting to him? Liz has centre stage at the moment…[Read more]

  • AMY IN LIVERPOOL

    “Hey, where are you off to?” 

    Amy turned round.  “What’s it to you, boss? You’re not going to make me go to the pub again, are you?”

    She stood with one hand on her hip, tapping a foot and swin […]

    • Julie replied 1 week ago

      Anne, this is a FANTASTIC scene . It’s vivid, full of atmosphere of the time period, and simply leaps off the page as a piece of writing. I have no idea what you mean by gloopy because you have nailed the emotions of the very two different but connected women and taken us into the wry humour of life in Liverpool. It’s marvellous.

    • Oh dear, I commented on this scene earlier today, but my comment must have gotten lost in the interwebs 😉 I love to see Amy’s life away from Carrie. For some reason I had thought she was a radio or TV journalist (don’t know where I got that idea), so it was a surprise to see her working at a newspaper/magazine. Also very interesting. The journalists seem a lot more accepting of a female colleague than Carrie’s fellow police officers. I half expected the Beatles to show up in that bar in Liverpool at some point 😉 The story of Carrie and Amy is so big, I think you could well turn it into a novel of its own. Nothing gloopy about the scene, btw.

      • Hi Eva-Maria
        Thanks for the reassurance!
        Your memory is excellent, Amy started off at a radio station but I’ve given her a change of career! I think the Arts were far more accepting of women than the police force, even though there are still limits on that tolerance.
        I did toy with having the Beatles show up but decided that was a bit self-indulgent! We’ll get to visit the Cavern – I remember it well although the glory days had faded – but mustn’t get too carried away by walking down memory lane….
        I so enjoy writing about Amy and Carrie, here comes a sequel!

    • Hi Julie
      Thank you so much for that, this is the first setting where the detail has come along comfortably (no surprise there then!).
      Writing it made me suspect I have to mention way back that Amy has had relationships with men, even though Carrie hasn’t. So much to revise in v2!
      Thanks for commenting, appreciate it so much.

    • Hi, Anne-
      When Amy ran into a good-looking musician named Pete in Liverpool in the early 60s, I thought maybe we’d get to see something of Pete Best, the Beatles original drummer. (I understand that the lads tossed him out in part due to being the best looking and getting all the girls–which is why they picked Ringo to replace him. 🙂 )
      Instead of saying, “The old buildings still showed signs of war damage,” what about showing us some of it? I would love to know some specifics.
      Great scene. Nice to see Amy again, even with she and Carrie still failing to reconnect. Hope it doesn’t last too much longer or they may not be able to mend it.

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  • AMY IN LIVERPOOL

    “Hey, where are you off to?” 

    Amy turned round.  “What’s it to you, boss? You’re not going to make me go to the pub again, are you?”

    She stood with one hand on her hip, tapping a foot and swin […]

  • No no no – Pierce Brosnan is perfect, definitely NOT Liam Neeson, he’s got a face you could get fed up with in no time. Go with your instincts – first choice was spot on!.

  • Hi Eva-Maria
    Thanks for your comments and suggestions, always so welcome. I think v2 will have Horton’s desperate attempts to get out and the horror of her death right at the beginning. I don’t think it can go anywhere else.
    Wilson is a good lad and, as his mum advises, he’s waiting for the right girl. An old-fashioned romantic.
    Only 12 to go…[Read more]

  • 1) You’re welcome!
    2) Sounds juicy!!

  • Hi Eva-Maria
    Thanks for the questions, they’re really helpful because I’m not sure I’ve cracked all the problems. I did some research that said about three days without water was sufficient. I think I’ll have her arrive home very thirsty!
    Yes, I think Melanie did have the mental strength not to go back, her attitude is “job done”.
    I’ve had…[Read more]

  • Hi Deryn
    Thanks so much for your encouraging comments, I really felt after I’d posted that I’d committed the unforgivable sin of over-explaining. I think it still needs more interjections and perhaps she can be interrogated a bit more.

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