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Ana commented on the post, The Paper Man by Ana Diaz 3 hours, 43 minutes ago
Thanks a lot Georgiana, this was a hard one to write and I’m over the moon with your comment xxx
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Ana commented on the post, Life Cycle by Georgiana Nelsen 1 day, 22 hours ago
Beautiful. Tight, flawless prose and full of significant deatails – the song in the pick-up’s radio, the squeaking leather, Cody’s curiosity. The message of creativity serving as lifeline. I loved this one Georgiana.
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Ana commented on the post, The Paper Man by Ana Diaz 1 day, 23 hours ago
Thanks Sharmayne!
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Ana commented on the post, A Permanent Condition by Sharmayne Riseley 2 days, 1 hour ago
Hey Sharmayne,
this is very well written and with excellent tempo. It portrays the senselessness of addiction to a t. But my favorite part was Ronnie, the way you describe him is vivid and hilarious. I love reading carefully crafted stories, which take a lot to write but then flow easily and gripping the reader until the end. In other words, I’d…[Read more] -
Ana commented on the post, Permanent Creativity by Sue MacDonald 2 days, 1 hour ago
Hi Sue,
this is interesting, specially the way you characterize Jenny-Mae, the way you quote her interactions creates a vivid picture of this kind of person. I enjoyed the stalking ingredient but being a horror writer myself I would’ve liked it to be taken further. It makes nevertheless for a very entertaining read! -
Ana commented on the post, –1929–WHAT CAME BEFORE THE TRAIN by Laurie Claypool 2 days, 1 hour ago
Hi Laurie,
this is tight, poignant and built with impressive precision. You master the art of flashback in a very cinematic style. Your prose is direct and yet quite poetic. It moved me. Very good job. -
Ana commented on the post, Aiden by Patty Panni 2 days, 16 hours ago
Wow. This is sensational. Even though the foster mom is the narrator, I could see the situation from Aiden’s eyes and feel what he was feeling. You seem to understand children a lot. The fruit part is, in it’s simplicity, one of the most beautifully moving pieces of writing I’ve come across in this challenge. So so well done, Patty, congratulations.
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Ana commented on the post, The Paper Man by Ana Diaz 2 days, 16 hours ago
Thanks so much Laurie. I’m still working on it but hope to finish it this year.
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Ana commented on the post, The Paper Man by Ana Diaz 2 days, 16 hours ago
Thank you Jeff!
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Ana commented on the post, The Paper Man by Ana Diaz 2 days, 16 hours ago
Thanks a lot Sue. I’m only half way through, slow but steady 🙂
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Ana commented on the post, "Permanent" (Poison Pen Entry 5) by Lauren Benere-Forder 2 days, 17 hours ago
Hi Lauren,
this is a straight forward, moving, excellent piece. It moves forward with ease and honesty. It’s realistic in style and real in the way your narrator conveys her feelings. Superb writing. -
Ana commented on the post, The only permanent constant is Change by Jeff L. Mauser 4 days, 17 hours ago
Many men around when I grew up took a secondary role in parenthood, mine included. Some even stepping back completely. I’m fascinated by stranged child-parents relationships. Thank you for your openness and honesty, that’s what makes the story great.
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Ana commented on the post, The only permanent constant is Change by Jeff L. Mauser 4 days, 17 hours ago
Thank you for sharing this, Jeff. It resonates big time. My mom passed in December and the oxygen and morphine part I knew too well. I wonder what made father and son feel like strangers, but it happens a lot within certain generational divides. The care the son provided shows where real love is at. Well done.
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Ana wrote a new post, The Paper Man by Ana Diaz 6 days, 2 hours ago
Silver sinks the axe at the foot of the olive tree and looks up at the sky like a hawk, with open nostrils. A whiff confirms that he hasn’t imagined it: things are getting ugly. Another blow shears through a t […]
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Ana commented on the post, Angelina, or The Red Moon by Ana Diaz 2 weeks, 4 days ago
Wow that’s such a lovely comment Seyi, thank you!
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Ana commented on the post, Angelina, or The Red Moon by Ana Diaz 2 weeks, 4 days ago
Hehe thanks Georgiana ❤️
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Ana commented on the post, Angelina, or The Red Moon by Ana Diaz 1 month ago
Thanks Adam, glad you liked it!
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Ana commented on the post, Angelina, or The Red Moon by Ana Diaz 1 month ago
Thanks so much Becky!
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Ana commented on the post, Perilous Rocks and Dangerous Shallows by Georgiana Nelsen 1 month ago
Oh, G this is beautiful..! It reads almost like a poem, and the images and sounds are so melancholic and lyrical. That ending, the word “skydiving” stiking out like a punch, it’s beautiful sadness all around. Gorgeous work.
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Ana commented on the post, Tempted by June Hunter 1 month ago
Hi June,
you did a great job with the first paragraph specially, building up the scene through a few selected strokes. I didn’t expect arrogance to be a deal-breaker here, and it blew my mind a little bit. Honestly, all those oils, I was thinking he may be a gay clichĂ©. You twisted it greatly, and I love her final, empowering reaction to open…[Read more] - Load More
This story is beautifully written. I love how the world is fleshed out with details coming out naturally in the narrative. I loved the image of him becoming a paper man. I’d love to read more of this longer work.
Laurie
Thanks so much Laurie. I’m still working on it but hope to finish it this year.
Thanks for the beautifully written story, Ana. I’m intrigued in how the longer story will play out. How you weave his work trimming the trees into the overall story.
Thanks for the read.
Thank you Jeff!
I’m looking forward to reading more of this intriguing and beautifully expressed story pans.
Thanks a lot Sue. I’m only half way through, slow but steady 🙂
A great story Ana, and I love the image of him becoming a paper man. That’s so well done. Terrific imagery as well. I really enjoyed your story. Well done.
Thanks Sharmayne!
Gorgeous writing, as usual, Ana. I love the way you draw out the characters through contrast. The olive grove battling the drought is a lovely image…those gnarled trees have stories to tell. I’m curious about where the boy has gone. It is also telling that she calls him”your son”…
Paper man is a brilliant image.
G
Thanks a lot Georgiana, this was a hard one to write and I’m over the moon with your comment xxx