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  • Amrita! If I ever get published my endorsement quotes will come from you. This “something about it that forces you to keep reading” is my highest goal with writing. Your words make me so proud and happy, they give me energy to keep going. I thank you for your support and positivity. I hope you’re healthy and safe xxx

  • Thanks a lot Georgiana! I’m so glad because I wasn’t so sure about this one. I love the horror genre but this one was a tough nut. So happy it worked for you xxx

  • Thanks a lot June!

  • I bet some short stories work out better than others, and if they mean something one can always go back to them at some point, or just leave it. More like modelling with clay than chiselling the marble of a novel. It’s all about learning anyways. These times seem to put too much pressure for instant success and perfection, but art has its own…[Read more]

  • Wooho! The stakes are rising and the story is coming together! I enjoyed this scene very much, the more introspective start and the action following, with a bad-ass female character. I liked the podcast bit and would really like to know more about that subplot, if you’d consider it. I like it when you add layer over layer of stories and still make…[Read more]

  • Hey Chantel,
    you did again a great job at building up the tension. It reminded me at some points to The Goonies or Stand By Me. Some bits I found too over-explanatory (“his ten-year-old legs”; “It’s the middle of the night, and we’re sneaking into Druid’s Park to dig for the treasure…”), but like trying not to be, if you know what I mean. Semi-…[Read more]

  • Hi Georgiana,

    it’s always delightful to read you, and all your short stories put together paint a very accomplished Southern picture. I like the way you get into the minds of the young characters. Good one.

  • Hey June,

    so many words rushed through my head while reading this, and at the end I’m just speechless. Your attention to detail, your way of presenting the characters with just a little touch of description, your polished style is just superb. The take on the prompt is beautiful. My comment is sloppy and doesn’t make it justice. This is real literature.

  • Hey Chantel,
    that really means something to me. I was surprised by it, because I clicked ‘submit’ expecting no real positive feedback. I struggled a lot with this one. I want to escape my own phrasal mannerisms by experimenting. I read about expressionist literature and I thought of what could happen if Poe gave it a go. That been said, I think…[Read more]

  • It was the year 1971 when I met him, in a bar, deep within the haze of the night.They called him The Vulture, and like the bird his neck was thick, his feet were huge, and he entertained the habit of crashing […]

    • Hi Ana
      I truly think that this is some of your best work, especially in terms of style. It’s such a beautiful read, regardless of the subject matter. And the story itself is certainly a captivating one. Well done on this one xxx

      • Hey Chantel,
        that really means something to me. I was surprised by it, because I clicked ‘submit’ expecting no real positive feedback. I struggled a lot with this one. I want to escape my own phrasal mannerisms by experimenting. I read about expressionist literature and I thought of what could happen if Poe gave it a go. That been said, I think it needs lots of editing, but I became exhausted of it. Thank you so much!

        • I truly think the experimentation worked for you. I felt exactly the same this month, struggling and sort of wanting to just leave it for the month. I’m not sorry I put something up though, but it took more from me than it should have and the effort didn’t produce something I’m happy with. I completely understand your space, but you’ve probably built it up worse than it is xxx

          • I bet some short stories work out better than others, and if they mean something one can always go back to them at some point, or just leave it. More like modelling with clay than chiselling the marble of a novel. It’s all about learning anyways. These times seem to put too much pressure for instant success and perfection, but art has its own mysterious ways hahaha x

    • Oh my goodness! This is an interesting style of writing. Almost like poetry. The stilted, backwards and forwards ‘dialogue’ is an excellent way of moving the story along. Well done and thank you for sharing.

    • Writing horror is something I think helps all writers. This one is superb Ana. There are so many questions about these characters, but we don’t really know…or want to know … the answers. Monsters come in all shapes. Love the interview format!

      Your descriptions are so vivid! this one just jumped out: “A coarse beard crowned the ensemble, the upper lip hidden under the foliage, the lower one hanging open, crooked and garrulous, letting the beer foam spill as he spoke, as he went back to”

      and amped up from there. woosh!

      G

      • Thanks a lot Georgiana! I’m so glad because I wasn’t so sure about this one. I love the horror genre but this one was a tough nut. So happy it worked for you xxx

    • Hi Ana,
      I cannot tell you how relieved I am to be able to comment on your story! I read it two days ago but due to the ‘ad’ problem and also some issues with the comment box, I just wasn’t able to. I am thrilled now because I can finally tell you how engrossing your story was. Crime fiction is your forte, no one can take that away from you. But every time I think there isn’t anything else that can take me aback…you surprise me. This was such a dark study into the mind of a serial killer. It was a hard read, gross in parts…but there’s something about it that forces you to keep reading. This line made me hold my breath – “I imagined him surrounded by armchairs and pallets, clouds of dust over his head, his passion delighting in the fractures and the severing, his craft enthralled by the deformities and the avenue of possibilities… Was he an oligophrenic?” And thank you for that gift of a word (oligophrenic). This was classic you! Thank you for sharing!

      • Amrita! If I ever get published my endorsement quotes will come from you. This “something about it that forces you to keep reading” is my highest goal with writing. Your words make me so proud and happy, they give me energy to keep going. I thank you for your support and positivity. I hope you’re healthy and safe xxx

  • Hey Kathleen,
    thanks for sharing an uplifting and human story, it reads very well and the dialogues are engaging. Other people here already pointed out the same little hang-ups I noticed so I know you’re working on them. Overall my impression was good, thank you for sharing!

  • Hey Mark,
    thanks for the feedback. Good to know about how the prosecution should address their client, I’m only a beginner in the proper judicial terms and this kind of information is very helpful. I’ll keep than in mind for the re-write. Thanks!

  • Hey Elizabeth,
    thank you for reading and the insightful feedback. It was a hard month time-wise, therefore the lack of a proper ending. I will consider going back to this story, though. It has many interesting aspects to dig into. Thanks again!

  • Hey Mark,
    I enjoyed your personal tribute to 9/11, specially because it’s from a family’s perspective going about their day, unaware of their place in history. It’s so dramatic without ‘trying’ to be. It made me think about all the little stories that every victim had before their lives were so brutally taken. I loved the back and forth of the…[Read more]

  • Hi Elaine,
    I loved it, it’s so creepy. I read it so fast and couldn’t wait to know how the story ended. I picture every image in my head like a movie, and you built up an amazing tension, cool one!

  • Hey Rebecca,
    I enjoyed your depiction of this harsh and embittered woman. The reveal of her true nature took me by surprise after such pleasant description of the garden, I found this contrast very interesting. She seems to be jealous of everything and everybody, and in that sense I feel a bit sorry for her. I’d like to hear what’s next in line…[Read more]

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  • Wow… I’m not sure that’s the perfect setup for a happy marriage, dear Felicity… Amazing piece. My favorite I’ve read from you. I cannot stop thinking of Flannery O’Connor when I read you, sorry for mentioning it again, but I adore her. I LOVE the way you throw the story out there, in an almost conversational tone, which is so well ingrained in…[Read more]

  • Hey Chantel,
    this is spooky indeed! Love the ending, so self-contained (it has happened before; mom is aware of it), no need to say any more. If anything, I found mom’s character a tad flat, but it can also be due to the wordcount. It would’ve definitely terrified me to read this as a child though. It works perfect as a standalone as well; I…[Read more]

  • Hey Amrita,
    this rounding out Rhine’s character with more information about his background works perfectly after the previous scene with more action. I love the way you explain Rhine’s evil in that chronological context, and how you make us readers feel sorry for a baddie -Joker crossed my mind a few times, haha. A very rich and information-laden…[Read more]

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