Thanks a lot Georgiana, this was a hard one to write and I’m over the moon with your comment xxx

Beautiful. Tight, flawless prose and full of significant deatails – the song in the pick-up’s radio, the squeaking leather, Cody’s curiosity. The message of creativity serving as lifeline. I loved this one Georgiana.

Thanks Sharmayne!

Hey Sharmayne,
this is very well written and with excellent tempo. It portrays the senselessness of addiction to a t. But my favorite part was Ronnie, the way you describe him is vivid and hilarious. I love reading carefully crafted stories, which take a lot to write but then flow easily and gripping the reader until the end. In other words, I’d…[Read more]

Hi Sue,
this is interesting, specially the way you characterize Jenny-Mae, the way you quote her interactions creates a vivid picture of this kind of person. I enjoyed the stalking ingredient but being a horror writer myself I would’ve liked it to be taken further. It makes nevertheless for a very entertaining read!

Hi Laurie,
this is tight, poignant and built with impressive precision. You master the art of flashback in a very cinematic style. Your prose is direct and yet quite poetic. It moved me. Very good job.

Wow. This is sensational. Even though the foster mom is the narrator, I could see the situation from Aiden’s eyes and feel what he was feeling. You seem to understand children a lot. The fruit part is, in it’s simplicity, one of the most beautifully moving pieces of writing I’ve come across in this challenge. So so well done, Patty, congratulations.

Thanks so much Laurie. I’m still working on it but hope to finish it this year.

Thank you Jeff!

Thanks a lot Sue. I’m only half way through, slow but steady 🙂

Hi Lauren,
this is a straight forward, moving, excellent piece. It moves forward with ease and honesty. It’s realistic in style and real in the way your narrator conveys her feelings. Superb writing.

Many men around when I grew up took a secondary role in parenthood, mine included. Some even stepping back completely. I’m fascinated by stranged child-parents relationships. Thank you for your openness and honesty, that’s what makes the story great.

Thank you for sharing this, Jeff. It resonates big time. My mom passed in December and the oxygen and morphine part I knew too well. I wonder what made father and son feel like strangers, but it happens a lot within certain generational divides. The care the son provided shows where real love is at. Well done.

Wow that’s such a lovely comment Seyi, thank you!

Hehe thanks Georgiana ❤️

Thanks Adam, glad you liked it!

Thanks so much Becky!

Oh, G this is beautiful..! It reads almost like a poem, and the images and sounds are so melancholic and lyrical. That ending, the word “skydiving” stiking out like a punch, it’s beautiful sadness all around. Gorgeous work.

Hi June,
you did a great job with the first paragraph specially, building up the scene through a few selected strokes. I didn’t expect arrogance to be a deal-breaker here, and it blew my mind a little bit. Honestly, all those oils, I was thinking he may be a gay cliché. You twisted it greatly, and I love her final, empowering reaction to open…[Read more]