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  • Amy Trakos commented on the post, Hyped by Seyi 1 month ago

    Hello Seyi! What a rollercoaster of a ride this story is! I was routing for your main character, and so pleased with the way things turned out. You deal with a lot of things here in such a wonderfully humourous way and I honestly think that so many people, not just those in this lovely group, would benefit from reading such a story. Maybe its…[Read more]

  • Catherine..I obviously meant not failed to impress!!!!! Sorry!! Clearly reading stories with a glass of Guiness isnt a good idea!

  • Catherine I have had the great pleasure of reading many of your stories this year and this one, like the others, has not failed to disappoint. I really enjoyed this. It had a bouncy feel to it which made me feel like I was being taken along in the car ride with them and the imagery was excellent, especially once they’d arrived at the arena. I…[Read more]

  • This was a fabulous read. So uplifting and just a wonderful piece to read right now as the new year approaches. I love the humour, intertwined with the philospohy of not expecting too much, and then the irony of Carol moaning at her second cookie that also wasnt fresh! I really felt for Joyce trying to read her kindle and felt as if I was also…[Read more]

  • Sorry I meant to say ‘read’ although it also stands out from many I have written too!

  • Hi Limor this is such a fabulous original piece that stands out from many of the other stories I have written. You have a real treasure here and can see why it is part of a longer series. Brilliant imagery – I could see everything as if it was a shirt film!

  • Hi Seyi thanks so much for reading and your really helpful comments, much appreciated! Yes I was searching for what someone feeling down might look for on you tuube and aside from animals hurting themselves this is what I thought of..I think maybe I have seen too many builders getting hurt videos, but I would say, not from having searched for…[Read more]

  • Hi Bronwen thanks so much and I’m thrilled it felt like watching a short film! I am a great fan of creating imagery!

  • Hi Catherine thanks so much for reading and commenting.

  • Hi Elizabeth thanks so much for reading and your comments. I’m glad you felt the flow wasnt interrupted and that you weren’t expecting the twist at the end, that’s always a good thing!

  • Hi Limor thanks so much for reading and your lovely comments. Well done to you for also letting go and achieving so much in the process. Thanks so much and the same to you too..Long may you write and run 🙂

  • Hi Athina thanks so much for reading and I’m so glad you enjoyed it. Salamos is a fioctional island..I do enjoy coming up with random names for Greek islands!

  • I really enjoyed your story Cinthia. Great use of imagery and you had me hooked throughout…It felt so real, like watching an episode of The West Wing (one of my favourites!) Now I want to know more…what did he have in that bag??? Well done!

  • A lovely christmassy story Athina that I enjoyed with my duvet and got chocolate. Thanks for spreading some end of year cheer!

  • Brilliant piece Bronwen. Your imagery is always great but I think this is the best I’ve ever read, it played out in my head..like a movie! Well done really enjoyed this a lot.

  • This is a fantastic story Sean I really enjoyed i t a nd agree that it would be great to extend it. Great twist at the end I didn’t see coming. A hugely imaginative piece REALLY well done!

  • Thanks Sean really glad you enjoyed it!

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    ‘All the gear, no idea’. Tom’s words chime in my head as I grapple with my race number – 217. I try to block him out. The start line of my first marathon is no place to become […]

    • The scene imagery was really nice! The cats racing around like deranged fireworks make me literally laugh. I also really liked the way little victories were accentuated by micro flash backs to Tom.

    • That was a great story, Amy. I loved your description of the surroundings, interspersed with bouts of humour. I’ve never heard of Salamos before but I do love the Greek islands.

      • Hi Athina thanks so much for reading and I’m so glad you enjoyed it. Salamos is a fioctional island..I do enjoy coming up with random names for Greek islands!

    • Amy I love this story. Not only because I’m a runner but because I have also left the negativity behind and achieved so much in life from letting go. Your story is beautifully written, all the while with the underlying plot of a rotting relationship woven into a woman learning to rise up. Long may you write and run.
      Thanks for the story!
      Limor.

      • Hi Limor thanks so much for reading and your lovely comments. Well done to you for also letting go and achieving so much in the process. Thanks so much and the same to you too..Long may you write and run 🙂

    • This is awesome. I’m not a runner, yet this is somehow still totally relatable. Your protagonist’s voice is realistic and entertaining. You weave past with present seamlessly, providing sufficient backstory while not interrupting the flow. I especially love it when Tom runs by her. Was not expecting that.

      Very well done. Thank you for sharing.

      • Hi Elizabeth thanks so much for reading and your comments. I’m glad you felt the flow wasnt interrupted and that you weren’t expecting the twist at the end, that’s always a good thing!

    • Loved the setting and atmosphere created as she slowly reveals her letting go of a stale relationship. Well done.

    • Loved this so much especially each track meaning so much to the character. The realistic thoughts and memories interspersed with the present is so wonderful. It felt like I was watching a short film!

      • Hi Bronwen thanks so much and I’m thrilled it felt like watching a short film! I am a great fan of creating imagery!

    • Seyi replied 1 month ago

      Eish, Amy, you have an awesome sense of humor and it shines through your writing. I smiled at ‘the Paula Radcliffe look-alike leading a team of Royal Marines into combat’ and laughed out loud at ‘family-sized bags of sweets.’ The line about ‘people hurting themselves on building sites’ still puzzles me but I get that your narrator was in a bad place after being made redundant. Some of your sentences run overlong a bit, I think. Plus I was not sure if she lived in Greece (if so, how come the practice runs through Regent’s Park, presumably in London?) and if she came to Greece specifically to run, or on holiday, perhaps a line about how she could afford it even after being made redundant would help. I liked the musical influences on her run and though I don’t know all the tracks you mentioned, I could easily imagine their impact from the context you provided. I really enjoyed this piece, well done and all the best. Seyi.

      • Hi Seyi thanks so much for reading and your really helpful comments, much appreciated! Yes I was searching for what someone feeling down might look for on you tuube and aside from animals hurting themselves this is what I thought of..I think maybe I have seen too many builders getting hurt videos, but I would say, not from having searched for them, just that they popped up!
        Yes so she lives in the UK but goes to Greece for the marathon (and stays there). I hadnt thought of the need to explain how she can afford it, I think I’d assumed redundancy money or a new job by then but thank you..always good to see plot holes! Thanks so much again. All the best, Amy

  • It certainly felt like it was there at the surface to me!

  • Thanks again for reading Paul much appreciated.

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