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  • Amana commented on the post, Blank by Amana 6 days, 17 hours ago

    This was exactly how I felt trying to come up with a poem for ‘blank’,’ and it turned out just fine. πŸ™‚ Thanks for reading, Aastha. I appreciate your comments.

  • Amana commented on the post, Blank by Amana 6 days, 17 hours ago

    Hi Alexis,
    Yes, they do, right? I was actually trying to write for this prompt and I would out blank, so I tried to put my frustration into it and came out with this. πŸ™‚ Thank you for reading.

  • Amana commented on the post, Blank by Amana 6 days, 17 hours ago

    I appreciate your comment, Charles_Ryder. Thank you!

  • Amana commented on the post, Blank by Amana 6 days, 17 hours ago

    I’m glad you enjoyed it, Jane. Thank you!

  • Amana commented on the post, Blank by Amana 6 days, 17 hours ago

    Not yet, Pam although it would be interesting to explore it. πŸ™‚ Thank you for your comments. I appreciate it.

  • Hi Pam Muller,
    I can picture a blank space gradually coming to life with nature and its colours. You’ve painted a canvas so vividly with your words. πŸ™‚

  • hi Jane,
    I love how your words come together to express how hope springs after a storm. πŸ™‚ Your poem expresses a refreshing optimism esp. during a precarious time. Thanks for this.

  • Amana wrote a new post, Blank by Amana 1 week ago

    Blank by Amana

    ***

    Oftenβ€”
    When everything I’ve written appears shallow and doubtful
    I wonder sometimes whether my thoughts are not blank

    ***

    Read more of Amana’s work here.

    • Aastha replied 1 week ago

      That’s precisely what one feels during a writers block .The fear that your writing has charm but no purpose and meaning. .A well expressed poetry .

      • This was exactly how I felt trying to come up with a poem for ‘blank’,’ and it turned out just fine. πŸ™‚ Thanks for reading, Aastha. I appreciate your comments.

    • Your few words communicate such angst, such fear, such judgment.

      • Hi Alexis,
        Yes, they do, right? I was actually trying to write for this prompt and I would out blank, so I tried to put my frustration into it and came out with this. πŸ™‚ Thank you for reading.

    • Writer’s block, frustration and doubt rendered in a few but well-selected words in an intriguing form. Straightforward and reflective. Nice work, Amana!

    • Have you tried writing senryu? It’s compact like haiku, but more about human foibles rather than about nature. You put a lot of contemplation into a few words in your poem which is why I think you might like to give senryu a try.

      • Not yet, Pam although it would be interesting to explore it. πŸ™‚ Thank you for your comments. I appreciate it.

    • Jane replied 1 week ago

      Hi Amana, very short – but it still says a lot. A shame that you feel that way often, I certainly feel that way sometimes:) I really enjoyed your poem. Well done.

    • That moment of self-doubt, so well portrayed here in so few words. Well done!

  • Hi Jane, I loved the optimism in your poem. It’s so refreshing. πŸ™‚

  • Amana commented on the post, Virus by Hardly Haiku 1 month ago

    Hi Mark, I loved this, short and powerful. Well done!

  • Where all the time on our hands seem more,
    we see less liberty to pursue our preferences.Β Β 
    Yes, more time, that’s more opportunities
    with friends, more space necessary
    every moment, to interact and share
    but we […]

    • Jane replied 1 month ago

      Hi Amana
      A deep poem, with lots of pandemic anguish running through it.
      I like the way you set it out and a lot of your word choice was great.
      I do have a couple of queries though:
      Were the adversary remains concealed, – I feel this should be where – not were
      Were the culprit lives among us, – I also feel this should be where not were
      Well done and thanks for sharing.

    • Penny replied 1 month ago

      Hi Amana
      Very good read, I like the set out of the lines, and you managed to give emotion and depth to the content. Couldn’t have been easy doing that about Covid, without some personal emotion attached.
      I agree with Jane about the use of Where and were on those two lines.
      Good poem!

    • This is so topical and covers the thoughts so many of us are having at present. Well done for putting your thoughts as a poem.

  • I found this very inspiring towards the middle and concluding with a powerful statement, I am Me and this is who I AM. Loved it. πŸ™‚

  • Hi Marcena, I appreciate how you’ve told us a story that was very relatable β€”Mama. Brought me back to memories of my childhood and how my mom gave me the ‘look’. Thank you for sharing. πŸ™‚

  • Hi Jane, I loved what you did for this prompt, so genuine and straightforward, but it was fun and satisfying. πŸ™‚

  • Hi Katharine, I truly enjoyed this. Very relatable in this time of quarantine. This is a delightful read, thank you. πŸ™‚

  • Burden not your heart with needless fear

    Lift your gaze to pray’r in uncertainty

    Know, know that our God is here.

    When darkness threatens the atmosphere

    and unleashes great fury on humanity,

    Burden not your h […]

    • Very good! It flows very well. And the theme is spot on during this time! Thank you for a beautiful piece.

    • Hi Amana! I love how you weaved the truth of God into a very encouraging poem! Keep it up! Cheers, Forest

    • Joan replied 2 months ago

      I love the stately poetic phrasing of “burden not your heart with needless fear”!

    • Amen, Amana. God is definitely here! Thanks for sharing this lovely villanelle with us.

    • Jane replied 2 months ago

      Hi Amana. What a lovely poem. It is uplifting and powerful. And at this time when so many are scared and floundering it is nice to have such a positive poem. Well done.

    • I love the strength of this line – Burden not your heart with needless fear. This is a strong poem for our current times. Thank you.

  • Amana wrote a new post, MAMA by Amana 3 months ago

    scent of flowers fill the air
    her wrinkled hands warm
    in mine
    Β then she whispers,
    “It’s all going to be fine.”

    • Kim replied 3 months ago

      love how the Mom comforts the child – even in old age. Blessed ❤

    • Wonderful. A short but perfect description of what a mother can do. The first line invokes a series of stories. I wonder if the scent of flowers is from a garden, at a wedding, or funeral, a hospital room? Mother is there and tells you, “It’s all going to be fine.” Thank you.

    • Yes, a mother can comfort through any storm. Thanks for sharing.

      – Ismael

    • To me, the word that stood out the most is the word ‘warm’. The wrinkles show that she is old, and I get the feeling of impending loss (mother’s death), but the persona remembers it as ‘her hands are still warm’– remembering her as she was alive. I love that.

    • Oh so lovely, Amana. Beautiful images. I feel comforted. Thank you.

    • This is a beautiful moment in time Amana. Thank you for sharing a wonderful poem.

    • Jane replied 3 months ago

      Amana, this is so short and so sweet. I am assuming this an older mama about to take her leave of our Earth. I like how you depict her as being serene and accepting of her time to go. Well done:)

  • Ding, ding, dong,

    Kssh, kssh, boing

    Swoosh, bang,

    Boom, boom, pow!
    Cackle, crackle,
    Thud! Thump! Rattle,
    Purr, pop! Plunk,Β 
    Jingle, jangle, pow!

    Pow! Purr, plop,
    Swish, swoosh, splash
    Whip, lash, hsss, […]

    • Hi Amana,
      This is exactly what it sounds like when my kids used to play with their drums. A wonderful memory. Thanks for sharing. πŸ™‚

      – Ismael

    • bravo bravo well played

    • Fun! At least Grade 2. I hope your house is sound-proofed. This is great.

    • Hi Amana, I have been slowly making my way through all the poems. I find it quite a coincidence that yours and Martins are right next to each other and – so far – they are the only two that are made up entirely of onomatopoeia words:) Very clever. I also like the way you set out your three verses.

    • Dear Amana, this is very creative and fun! I like how your words are rhythmic, but not in such a strict sense that they don’t create a natural feel – I especially like the “screech” and ellipsis in the last stanza that suggests a bit of a wince. The layout gives it such a playful feel. Love it! πŸ™‚

  • Now I’m hungry… this is such a pleasant treat for the senses! πŸ™‚

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