Jealousy Makes You Evil by Estelle Westley

Jealousy Makes You Evil by Estelle Westley # Continued From Part One – M & M “Do you have a place to stay while you are here?” Mae asked as they sat on the beach watching the tide come in. “You are more than welcome to crash in my spare bedroom for a night or...

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Laura
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2 months ago

This story had me riveted. They were friends, but now one is angry with the other and passive/agressive while the other is agressive. They start out so nice! Well done. The only thing that caught my attention was that I wanted more detail in some areas. For example:

You could have given me an example of lovely (live plants on tile trivets), minimal (large space to walk around the sleek pale blue sofa) or view (of the waves crashing up against the pier).

Mae’s home was just as lovely inside. Very minimal but very tasteful and the view from the huge windows in the lounge just perfected the feel.

Keep up the fabulous writing!