ice by Maria Delaney

ice by Maria Delaney # you steal my balance when I step I waver back and forth beneath the frost is where you’re kept A chill passes from the north ~~~~~ do you snicker when I slip and fall awkward motion, failed attempts along the chilly ground, I crawl at your mercy, was always your...

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29 days ago

Ah you gave me a good chuckle, Maria. You took me to a place i have often been and when you see videos of people trying to stay upright when slipping on ice, you just know there is a snicker coming through its icy breath. Also like the structure of the poem and your use of small caps….very eye-soothing

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30 days ago

HI Maria, this sends chills up my spine! As the others have said, this poem and its double meaning makes me want a third stanza! You have mastered the art of a cliffhanger…

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1 month ago

Nice. Not looking at other’s comments so as not to be swayed by other interpretation, I see a lovely double entendre going on here. Frigid fiend, both in nature and in relationship. The human slant gripped me–powerful. Nicely done.

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1 month ago

Ice, frost, and chill- in more ways than one. The imagery is a light, but the meaning and intent feel deep, dark even. Love it.

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1 month ago

Hello Maria, ooh, winter is on its way, literally and metaphorically in your poem. Who is tripping the narrator up and for what dastardly reason? I like your poem very much.

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1 month ago

I love that there are so many ways to interpret this, yet the message remains the same; I think this may be my favorite of your poems so far!

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1 month ago

This is so powerful! I love the metaphor of the chill/ice with the bad relationship. Nicely done!

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1 month ago

Great poem Maria. I also fear more lurks beneath these words which paint beautiful imagery.

The rhythm and rhyme of the piece works well and is a pleasure to read and a feel like I slide over them easily as I would the ice.

Well done and thanks for sharing.

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1 month ago

Oh indeed – the extended metaphor is chilling. Well done, Maria!

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1 month ago

I can read and appreciate your poem on many levels. I honour your skill in this achievement.

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1 month ago

Well done, Maria! Your poem sends a chill down my spine, it gives an eerie feeling !

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1 month ago

Hi Maria, Yes I do feel this one has an icy undertone (sorry couldn’t resist the pun there). I enjoyed your poem. I liked the way you set it out too and your font. It all adds to the mystique of your poem. Well done:)

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1 month ago

I like that it is short and hits home. The imagery is on point. Love it!

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1 month ago

Hi Maria.
This is a very nice job. The text is sensitive and delicate, and the subtext much the same.
Thank you for sharing.

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1 month ago

Hi Maria. I feel that there might be a double entendre lurking somewhere between the lines, beneath the frost. Lovely images. Well done and thank you for sharing.

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1 month ago
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Haha. I just scrolled down to read other comments, Maria, and June used the same terminology. I swear I did not see it before writing my own reaction.