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A resourceful ambulance driver meets and beats bad traffic

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Mary Lou
3 months ago

Hi Seyi,
Although you’re describing an unfortunate situation, I think the details and the narrator’s thoughts made it sound pretty funny–especially the very last line. I’m also glad you added notes explaining the meaning of terms that may not be obvious to everybody.

Charles R.
3 months ago
Reply to  Seyi

I enjoyed your story and your humour. I was worried that the drivers were going to just rip the unfortunate woman and dump her somewhere. Thanks for posting. 🙏👍

Jane
3 months ago

Hi Seyi, enjoyed this ‘fast paced’ short story. I wonder if this would really occur. So sad capitalising on someone’s fear and misfortune. Poor old lady:) Well done and thanks for sharing.

Megan Furniss
3 months ago

This is so wicked. And funny. And totally horrible. And funny again.

Dionne
3 months ago

Great details and a fantastic story.

Nsbnina
3 months ago

Wicked Seyi, wicked sad and wicked funny. I like your MC.

C Alexis
3 months ago

What a wonderfully wonky, wicked weaving tale. It seems factual, however, my hope is that it’s imaginary.

Joyce Finny
3 months ago

LOL! Outrider service!! For a moment, I thought they were gonna carry the patient on the bike! But when I read how they bullied everyone into giving way!! 😀 😀 Absolutely hilarious!! 😀

Joyce Finny
3 months ago
Reply to  Seyi

Lol!! I know! Imagine if one of them had to carry the glucose bag while the other carried the patient. Or worse if he had a catheter bag sticking out of him!! 😀 😀 God! That would be so funny!!

Glen Benison
3 months ago

Satirism for sure Seyi…..a very enjoyable read. You had me with your opening line…. a really good hook.
I loved the imagery of the out-riders kicking car doors 🙂 ……..and also could visualize the marketing manager in his cushy office chair creating the slogans…. good one.

Beth Stillman Blaha
3 months ago

I like stories where the world seems a little more fast and loose than my white bread world. Like everyone else I love the images of the bike guys bullying the cars to make way for the ambulance and then the driver openly taking his cut in front of the wife. I don’t live in a densely populated area and we all pull over for sirens. We are altogether too orderly. Thanks as always Seyi 🙂

Anne
3 months ago

Hi Seyi,
I love the way you portray such dire situations with an underlying humor. This one was no different. Like Charles, I was worried that they’d harm the woman once they received the EFT. Thank you for not taking us that dark route.
Thanks for sharing. 🙂

Anne
3 months ago
Reply to  Seyi

Oh absolutely and send me a kind horror-warning too, please. 😉

Anne
3 months ago
Reply to  Seyi

Hehe. I used to think I suck at writing suspense/thriller until Reprobate. Since it’s been getting such kind encouragements, I might end up doing just that.

P.S. Can your own words render you sleepless? 😛

Deryn
3 months ago

Hi Seyi…better late than never…was referring to my getting to your story but then I realised it could also apply to the ambulance’s arrival at the hospital!! Great piece that suits your style much better than romcom!!