Between the Sun and the Moon by Taryn – Final

Old friends share a serendipitous catch up, where old secrets emerge.

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Delrae Goodburn Lurie
10 months ago

Cool story. I enjoyed the twist at the end.

Charles R.
10 months ago

Well done. I kind of saw what was coming when Margot talked about Tom and her had adopted a baby. My only critique would be maybe a little more physical resemblance between Victoria and her daughter – maybe a mannerism would have worked too just to emphasize the connection. I really liked your story Taryn.

Paul J P Slater
10 months ago

Excellent story, if slightly given away before the end. Enjoyable none the less.

Cheers,
Paul

Peggy
10 months ago

Great story, Taryn. You did a great job contrasting the two women, engaging me in their shared story and building up for the twist at the end. Well done!

KB
KB
10 months ago

Cool story. I like the twist ending. I picked up on the fact that the adopted daughter was the daughter. Was it Tom who raped Victoria? I’m not sure I’m reading that right.

SM Prasad
10 months ago

Great plot twist at the end. The errant curl seemed to be the mannerism that they shared. I assume that Tom was the father and the rapist in this situation. So this got very dark at the end. I really liked your description of Margot, particularly this quote, “Victoria had always felt the giddying force of her presence, both intoxicating and unnerving at the same time, as if she were walking along a roof’s edge. Things happened when she was around her.”
It was good foreshadowing as well. What is interesting to think about is whether Tom is a rapist who decided at the moment to attack Victoria, or whether it was premeditated to get a child. From his reaction to Victoria, he didn’t expect to see her again. So that is an ambiguous question that is left dangling. Well done!

SM Prasad
10 months ago

I would have changed, “her” in the quote above to “Margot” just to make the pronoun clearer.
SP